Jasmine Hart

It is beautiful, but I think that you over-used your adjectives.

Thanks for the feedback.

Hey guys. Thanks for the comments. Apologies for the typos, I'm not a great typist, and I was exhausted when I was typing this up, which really didn't help! Biancarayne-thanks ...

I think it's great. I especially liked the fourth stanza. I think I'd take the "every day" out of the second line though, as, since you've said "daily", I don't ...

I like it, but I'd say, "It is all in vain," just so you're not switching between tenses.the present tense really helped the flow, and the last two lines worked ...

I love it, but I'd use a capital M for Michaelangelo! Your imagery is amazing, and the enjambment helped it flow which I think helped create the peaceful nature of ...